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The Christmas Gift

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by Anonymous

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by Sabrina_Holzen11/29/17

Feedback is greatly appreciated

So, second ever attempt at erotica it is. Again I'm not really satisfied with my work; I feel like there's something missing. Meaning I don't really get aroused by it.
Some of you mentioned my style as "poetic" or "shakespearean", and I can't really say it's an active stylistic choice, but rather just how it comes to me. I'd love to hear opinions on the matter.
I'm currently working on a third and fourth stories, in which I'll try and do something different just to see how it turns out.

Hope you guys do get hard or wet reading my attempts at whatever it is I'm attempting. Don't forget to reach me on my mail by the feedback tab! I loved responding to those, haha.

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by Anonymous11/29/17

I loved it

A woman's anus is my favourite thing.

Thank you for writing, and please continue.

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by Joey20111/29/17

I did like it

Great storytelling. But I wish you would’ve kept going. At least till they go back to the party. What she’s feeling like with his cum up her. Them glancing at each other then probably ending it there. But yeah, you had me reading riveted.

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by BehindTheEyes11/29/17

Nice

Loved the story! I totally played with myself when I read it. Very hot! 😘

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by Anonymous11/30/17

Amazing

Please continue the story it can't end there.

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by Anonymous12/05/17

The guy is a cunt…

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by Anonymous03/12/18

MORE PLEASE

THIS STORY IS ONE OF THE BEST I'VE READ ON HERE, YOU MUST ADD A SEQUEL, OR EVEN A PREQUEL EXPLAINING HOW THEY GOT TO THIS POINT (MORE IN DEPTH THAN THE BRIEF TELLING IN THE STORY).

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