...as you already said on the thread, but not terrible. Loved the poem and the concept. Keep it up! ~Minx
Reading the poem I sense you are reaching for something and almost getting there. I like the short poem but I wouldn't include the title in the image and I would think more about the spatial layout of the actual text.
That criticism sounds like I'm destroying your work. I'm not, I like what you did. I'm rooting for you because I sense you are on the edge of achieving something. The poem and the image make sense together.
of a poem. Clearly illustrates the hits and misses of life.
The swooshes in the poem can only be the sound of a basketball slipping magically through the net. The picture of a basketball net adds to the ambiance of this poem.
Those moments in life when everything comes together.
or hit a 3 pointer, TK U MLJ LV NV
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