All Comments on 'My First Time'

Your handwriting (typing) needs to be edited. Also you may find that paragraphs are generally more involved than a short sms text.

The anonymous comment is fair.

The idea was good you just need some work. True stories are always the best but often hard to put into words.

Keep writing it is great therapy for you and as you improve great stroking fun for us.

i am a mediocre writer myself but reading older stories I have improved. Read others and see where they might describe similar situations their way and learn what they did that pleased you.

It should be fun for all.

Erotica is no good if it's in shorthand. Flesh it out. Make it hotter.

A total fantasy of mine. I want to just spend time with a couple of men nude and enjoying each other. Jerking off and sucking each other. That would be totally amazing.

I’d love to suck two other men and fuck each other.

Good story