by quietmischief
For a guy who has been hanging around Lit for a while, why did you wait so long to submit this story?
I encourage you to write more, even though I myself do not care for the present tense narrative style. Also your tale totaly lacks any description. How tall's the wife? What color was her bikini? That sort of stuff. Could you smell the salt in the air as you strolled along the beach?
I like the "letter to you" style. It makes me feel like your talking to me. and i absolutly love the story, its sounds like something that i would personally love to have happen. Im not much for switching up but there is something arousing about having someone else watch you! keep writing!