by badgirl1986
This reads like it's told by a thoughtless, shallow, and witless airhead. So off the wall that I'm surprised that it hasn't floated into space by now.
One would think that you would at least be aware of the fact that your brother's wife's sister's husband is NOT YOUR BROTHER-IN-LAW! You switch grammatical tenses in your sentences more times than a pony express rider switched horses. Terrible sentence structure, poor grammar, thoughtless construction of ideas. A totally mindless piece of drivel. An obvious first draft that somehow escaped from the confines of the School for the Intellectually Challenged. If you decide to write again at least try to put some effort into it!
Is this a story or confession? Either way, what a shallow character and such a strange setup. It reads like a diary entry or email to a friend which is fine if that's your goal. If not, try to read some other stories and edit yours accordingly.
This is the worst dreck I've ever read in my life. Please stop writing. Thanks.
Since stories told by MY sister-in-law always excite me, please, write more stories about you and me...I mean, your brother-in-law.