All Comments on 'A Dildo Surprise'

Only disappointment was that you had published only one story. Looking for more.

What happened? What happened was her best friend’s husband fucked her several times during the weekend. I guessed early on that it was a clone of his cock. My mind was running rampant, 1) I was imagining Darci had a house security system with cameras in the house and they were watching. 2) they arrived home early and caught her in the act of using it. And finally, at the party, Darci said to the group “ just ask my friend, she’s been enjoying it while dog sitting for us”.

Fucking excellent you horny devil.

Solid 5. The clone was predictable, so I was expecting Darci to return early and catch her en flagrante.

Excellent story! Great pacing, very saucy sex scenes, and just the right amount of suspense. Looking forward to more stories from you!

Maybe you can write a sequel where Lynn buys the Clone-a-Cock kit, and next time she dog-sits, she uses it to clone the clone so she can have one of her very own!

Wow.

Loved this story. The pacing, the interior monologue, the detail. Oh yeah, the sex...

It takes so much time to write something this long. It takes even longer to do it right, to rework it, to proof it, and this was a fantastic work.

Thank you for sharing, and providing some stimulation which for me, brought to life the second half of this category, "Toys & Masturbation."

I’m sorry, but there was a consistent misuse of present and past tense. You really need to pick one and stick with it. The following is an example: “Wave after wave washes over me as I continue to ride this amazing dildo. It felt like several minutes before it subsided.”

Present tense in one sentence followed by past in the next. This interesting story was ruined by this. Cost you two stars. Recommend an editor next time.

Dear lord please make a part 2. I've never felt so turned on. Geez this was amazing, the detail and *shiver* This is probably one of, if not the best. Literotica story I've ever read and this 2I'll definitely be a repeat on those cold nights.

"She usually has a dog sitter do it but she was not available this weekend. I told her that I had nothing going on this weekend so I would love to help them out, plus it would give me a chance to see the dogs again. She thanked me and told me that they were leaving Friday after work and should be home late Sunday afternoon or Sunday night. I would need to feed the dogs Friday night and let them out one last time. Feed them Saturday morning and again let them out. This time I could leave them outside for the day as long as they had water and then just let them back in that night and feed them again. Sunday morning I would just have to feed them and let them out one more time and they would be home to take care of them after that."

You write this huge paragraph detailing the schedule of dog care (it could have all been omitted) and then she immediately forgets about it?

You switch from past to present tense. Try reading your stories out loud. It's easier to catch the mistakes if you do that.

"These guys clearly like rain more than me" -"more than I do."

"the dogs' closet" since there are more than one of them.

You have the word "sweatpants" three times in a row and the word "box" five times in one paragraph.

"the box was on ITS side", not "it's"

"Oh god, what the hell was I doing." - "Oh god! What the hell was I doing?'.

"Running my fingers along the underside of it feeling every vein until I reached the underside of the tip." This is not a sentence and you have "underside" twice. - "Running my fingers over it, I felt every vein until I reached the underside of the tip."

There is a lot of incorrect punction and put commas where there should be periods and vice versa.

I hope this is helpful.

Very sexy story. BTW, I enjoy editing and freely offer my assistance if you like.

Very good first submission! I'm looking forward to reading more from you. Five stars!

Please make a part 2, this is amazing <33

More please!

Please please please write additional chapters to this story. I had a very hard time keeping my hands off myself while reading this. I read it twice :-)

That was a fun read. Need more from this author. :)

What a delightful read. Would love to see Lynn's reaction when she sees Darci's husband. Keep up the great work!

Fun story. Enjoyed the surprise ending. Lends itself to an additional chapter or two for sure.

Nice read and loved the little surprise at the end. Hope you write some more.

Excellent story!!

Neat twist. I was half thinking that the dogs had something to do with it, but this was better ... if "more wholesome" is such a thing with erotica. Nice. ;)

Love the twist!!! Great story!

Great story! Predictable ending with the clone but who cares.. the content was HOT!!