All Comments on 'Jackson'

Good read.

That was an excellent story. I loved the way you were able to bring in Ali from another story and integrate it into your story. 5stars

Silly girl makes good

Great story, but the ending was too quick. I wanted more of the story after the cabin and not rush to the three kids with one on the way. I'd like to know more about their lives and the extended family.

The family repartee alone was worth the read. Vivid imagery and interesting characters. Strong story telling skills, but quite a few minor errors. Overall, it was a very enjoyable read.

Nice story.

Unfortunately, the end is a bit rushed.

Interesting story!

5

Thank you for the story. I liked it, but it feels a bit raw, as in unpolished. I apologize but I can't explain it better. The things I didn't like: unmarked scene breaks make reading it really confusing and annoying; you got the story to the best point where they should work on their reconciliation and introduced Wren, an interesting character, but you just cut it off with a short, abrupt ending that actually doesn't say anything about their life except implying he's successful and she's "barefoot and pregnant".

Good tale and I love how you do dialogue. Uneven and in parts chaotic. The whole panic 5 day trek frankly didn’t make sense. Everything from the beginning of that trek is more of a pastiche of sketch story elements with little connection. Really abrupt ending consisting of disconnected pieces that seem unrelated and unexplained

4 stars