by tungtied2u
Tongue tied? Hmmm...I don't know about that... But you do say in many ways (and words) what most share (not a bad comment), namely: getting up (not necessarily on the right side); finally getting out (maybe with some hope); grabbing something to eat (what was it?) doing errands; running back home (licking our wounds?)
feebly disguised as an attempt at poetry. I guess today just was not the day to read poetry here at Lit.
and screw that previous comment. Poetry without narrative is rather pointless.
this made me sad. It made me want to invite you out to dinner and pay attention to you. Therefore, it evoked a sensation and is by definition a good poem.
... about it being a short story disguised as poetry. The last stanza is very good. There are other good moments in the poem. Tighten it up some. :)