All Comments on 'Daisy Refined Ch. 01'

i like this story, and not just because my name is daisy.

You can almost taste the emotions you've layered into it. Great job.

What an amazing start! I can't wait to see the next chapter!

All of her feelings..and emotions...you have laid them out for us to absorb and feel with her...this is going to be a beautifull love story...I'll be checking for an update...

done there, TK, nicely done. Hurry up with the next chapter!

Gritty, realistic, and hot! Just like I imagine a day in oil refinery country would be. A wonderful story, very well told. Kudos!

Yes, you know I love the Italian grandmother's ass line. Who wouldn't? Not that I'm ass-obsessed or anything...

This is a gripping and beautifully written first half. You may not always feel it yourself, but you have a warm, realistic, and sizzling grip on reality, TK. Well done.

I tried to turn the page, to see what happens next...

*grins* GREAT suspense ending... you know we're all eagerly waiting the next installment!

Daisy Refined reads like a true memoir -- you can feel Daisy's anxiety and pain. The neighborhood bar is the perfect setting and first person is the perfect POV. Throw in a great sex scene, finish with suspense and you have a whopping good story. It's a 5.

But I'm "bumping" (our Nashville songwriters word)

on "one dead."

For me, she'd ask, immediately.

Waiting for the later letter on the table

seems like an artificial literary device.

(AND YOUR trump card is how natural your characters feel.)