- Mature
- Revenge is Sweet
- Comments
All Comments on 'Revenge is Sweet'
by lily_ann
- 19 Comments
Anonymousalmost 16 years agoWhy do so many authors seem to think 70-80% of their sentences or pargrahs are imcomplete without including either ... or word -- word?? Most all can be removed and the story becomes easier to read.
Anonymousalmost 16 years agoIf the punctuation is all the other person had to comment on...girl, you did great. I thought this story was so hot and I liked the ending also.
RossDanielsalmost 16 years agoI loved the transition from extreme anger to extreme sex. What a ride!
bruce22almost 16 years agoThe number of gals who fixate on their girl friend's
father is surprisingly large! Nice work. Thanks.
tnme3almost 16 years agoUnfortunately my best friends father is taken and not that handsome or fit.
lily_annover 15 years agoAuthorDon, I've asked you to stop commenting with your rude comments on my stories. I like anal, and that's why I write about it. Just because you like pregnancy stories doesn't mean everyone does, and it's not my fault it's not in the anal category - I originally had it there and it was moved by the Lit admins. So stop already! I don't care if you don't like anal - go read something else instead of wasting your time on my stories, then! There's plenty of them out there that fit what you like, just leave me alone!
Anonymousover 15 years agoWell done on another great story. From my experience Don always bitches about stories. He bitched when the woman in one of my stories licked the guy clean after he had shafted her ass. So don't stress about it. Just be content that you've made Don happy because he has something to bitch about in his life.
keep up the great stories, especially your latest as I love where that is heading. Maybe the cruise ship breaks down and the parents are away for another week.
Satisfier2007over 15 years agoThis story has some hot, vivid passages. FWIW, my favorites were:
<br />
* >> "I cried out loudly as he began moving them faster, curling his fingers to rub my g-spot as he sucked on my clit. I gasped, feeling myself getting close to orgasm as he finger-fucked my tight hole." << and
<br />
* >> "Look in the mirror," he [Dave] said. "I [Nicole] turned my head and looked. I guess I didn't have to worry about taking any more of his cock, because he was completely buried in my ass. I gasped, my pussy throbbing as I stared at the image of his cock buried in my ass. "Take the picture," I suddenly gasped. "God, this is hot..." He picked up Ashley's digital camera, pointing it at the mirror. <<
<br /><br />
Watching oneselves in the mirror is unusual and hot, and so is the self-photographing.
CharlesCameronover 15 years agoThis was exciting and funny, just like real sex should be! It left me with an erection and a smile.
Ignore the negative comments. If people don't like your tastes, let them read something else. It's a diverse world!
As for the pedantries, ignore them too: your stories read well. The "..." is a very useful device to indicate passage of a small amount of time in reported speech ... don't you think?
:-)
Karpinskiover 15 years agoWhat I love is the utter realism. What your character experiences is exactly the best I know how to treat a gal of any age. You pay close attention and operate in the attitude realm, the verbal realm, the tone of voice realm, as well as the emotional and the sensual realms, while touching two or three or four erogenous sites at once. You leave the point of view the same and let your character observe or imagine what her partner is experiencing. Just like the very best of real life, masterful and very very pleasing. Thank you.
OleTroubadoralmost 15 years agoI am quite impressed. Starting with the storm, the anger and developing a story line that has plausability indicates that you have authorative talent. In this story, you allowed the tension to build at a better pace, and permitted the sex itself to develop at what I felt was a realistic and enjoyable progression. I look forward to more!
Anonymousover 10 years agoGreat short story, Lilly_Ann. A nice, quick erotic read; thoroughly enjoyable. Looking forward to reading more of your work, Thanks!
Sampkyangover 8 years agoI don't see ANY revenge here....fucking an old guy becoming a skank herself. assley is a skank, could care less and she got the stud. where is the revenge? our poor wronged babe needs an STD test done too....
chytownalmost 2 years ago*****Nasty sex but so HOT!!! To bad you stop writing these Hot Story. Thanks for sharing.
lily_ann@lily_ann
