by RejectReality
Such a wonderful balance of narrative and dialogue -- steamy throughout...more! more! more!!
This is pretty much an object lesson in how to write a good erotic story. It is well paragraphed, making it easy to read, with good use of dialogue. Also the juxtaposition of graphic sex is neatly offset with what she is thinking.
I also think that she would like to try it up the ass............................
Realistic and sensuous buildup, careful and appropriate choice of vocabulary, good dialogue, and intensely arousing sex...
Yes indeed, an object-leason in how to write good erotica. Outstanding. Thank you.
Agreeing with the previous people that have posted. Well written, nice build-up and hot sex - all in all a really nice story. Just a small proofing error where Kelly all of a sudden changes name to Kyle for a split second - easily remedied with an edited version. ;)
Loved these characters and the set up. Wonder if I can get someone to rent out my basement? (Maybe I need a hot carpenter to build it first! Mm. The posibilities....) Thanks for a horny read. ;)
Excellent story.It reminds me of a delicious man I was with a few years ago.Thank you,thank you for triggering that hot memory.
Excellent story. Well written and a great read. I agree with Intercontinental. He should start off with a thorough sniffing, licking, sucking and tongue fucking of her tangy asshole until she comes. After that maybe she would like her back passage filled up. 5 stars.
The build in the story was well done, then the details during the sex really set it apart, great work
*****Very entertaining HOT AZZ read. I really enjoyed your storytelling. Thanks for sharing.