All Comments on 'A Journey Home'

simply amazing. Such a touching, heartfelt tale. As a writer you excell, I felt like I was there. Good luck with the contest :)

it was a long journey indeed, with ups and downs. but he made it in the end, he found his home and a lot more. it was a joy to read almost felt sad it was over, i wouldn't mind reading more =)

Good story great plot and well interwoven with your now expected great stories.

5 of 5

His emotional and physical journey from beginning to end was outstanding! I thought the summer tie in was clever and very integral to the plot by ‘waking up’ the world and him. In addition, the sensuality of that first meeting was powerful! And the end…I have no words, because this was amazing!

Loved the entire story and good luck in the contest!!!!

What a beautiful tale. Aerik's journey was indeed a trial at times but he remained strong.

Beautiful imagery in the world you created. Aerik's emotions from innocence to confusion, grief to love were so wonderfully spun throughout the tale.

I totally loved every moment of it. Well done! And Good Luck in the contest!

Such a well developed world and concept. This was such a complete story that as I look back at the first page I marvel at all the distance you took me so effortlessly. A thoroughly enjoyable and, even better, memorable reading experience. Thank you so much.

You already know how I feel about this!

writing abilities not too long ago???? Question answered.

More an action / romance than sci fi and so well expressed.<P>

Congrats Author - you will be looked forward to.<P>

With High Regard

it was too good... HAR HAR HAR. Really however, GREAT stuff! If ever your abilitys where in question they should not be now!

very very good...i look forward to reading more from you

Well done, Sir - this was a very enjoyable rites-of-passage tale, contrasting brutal scenes of conflict with heightened eroticism. Some nice physical descriptions as well. Keep writing and good luck in the contest.

This story was written very well.

I make my living as an editor, so I noticed a couple of typos, an awkward sentence here and there, and a minor plot/logistical issue or two, but by the end i just didn't care about any of those things, because the story was FABULOUS and I loved it! I loved Aerik's journey (physically through his world and as a character both), I loved the ending, I loved the world building. I read it last night and have been thinking about it on and off all day. And smiling. :) Thank you -- well done!

You know, it takes a tallented writer to make you feel the loss of Unkes more deeply than the deaths of the intended wife and her family at the beginning. I like how that garg became his last tie to his old life and the bond they formed so quickly became so strong. It was so sad when he stumbled onto the killer plants and Aerik risked himself to save him, only to have Unkes pass in his arms. Nice touch with the other brown eyed pup too, by the way! I enjoyed this story very much, as it was shaped in such a way that the pace seemed natural. It held my interest throughout. You took what could have easily been mundane, and wrapped it up beautifully. The fact that Aubria had Aerik's child and he was viewed as a oddity by his people allowing them to come back to each other was a lovely addition. Excellent story.

it was a great story keep up the amazing writing

A true "Hero's Journey." you would have done Joseph Campbell proud :) The story and characters were seamless and the reward for Aerik's growth and wisdom, being love and a newfound family was just beautiful. You elicited tears, soft sighs, smiles, gasps of pleasure, yearning, hope. Thank you.

I usually stay away from short stories but this one was recommended to be by so many people that I just had to take a look. I was literally crying with Aerik at his loses and hardships. Then in the summer and seeing his happiness come together.

Unlike most short stories that are a start to a epic novel this one is stand alone. It has a start, middle and a hearty end. I would love to see more but then again it is such a perfect story that I do not need to.

Great work!

I really enjoyed Young wolves so I started reading this with an open mind. The world you painted was harsh and dangerous and I understood that to live here you had to be strong, hearty and fast. The hero of the story also saw strength in his companions which others didnt. I liked the Gargs. Write on.

A very warming story.

I enjoyed the underline lesson that home is where the Heart is. Please keep up the awesome work.

This is a truly wonderful story. So coherent and well-written. Bravo!

I'd even go so far as to say one of the best stories on this site. All the ingredients were there for a feast to the imagination. Thank you author.

Your writing never ceases to astound me. You have a talent for creating unique characters that speak and feel with a personality all their own. I love that the story is driven by characters and their journeys, and while this is an erotic story, it would be just as good without the sex.

Please, keep writing!

John

Good story thanks!

JP

and that's all i have to say.

Truely beautiful. Thank you for the read.

beautifully written, all the human emotions were captured beautifully by you.excellent writing. keep it up, this surely was a great tale.

It's simple but amazingly happy tale.

Great story, plenty of action with just enough sex.

A unique setting for a traditional love story.

It reminds me of the books of Vardis Fisher in his attempts to understand the evolution of civilisation.

an adventure and romance in a truly unique setting

Added to my favorites list. 5*

A gem!

Fun classic love story. Thanks

My second reading of this little story. I still find it heart warming. Thank you for it.

This one deserves to win the contest good job

More!

A beautiful love story.