by thrillerauthor
Creative, humorous, and excellently written...I enjoyed it...good job!
So funny, and insidiously plausible…excellent style, you had me hooked!
Uproariously funny. I honestly didn't think I would like it, but I had a good time reading it. I hate reality tv, but I would watch this as I lmao. Good, no excellent job.
At least, that's my guess.
Not only was your story truly hilarious, it was also very touching. I enjoyed watching Jan and Becca grow closer over the course of filming.
I can also agree that those hormones can really mess a person up. Then again, in my case, they gave me some GREAT dreams.
You got inside the character's heads and made all of this sound so believable! If this was what had actually happened on one of those shows, I would have been hooked! If there was a 6 on the voting scale, you would have earned it. A true masterpiece, I'm already hitting the link to read the rest of your work. Funny romances are some of my favourite stories, if you ever write a novel I'll be lined up to buy the first edition. Thankyou for making my day.
It's a very good story, it didn't depend upon sex but on good writing and thriller. I hardly prevented my selef from jumping to the end to know what happened. For the first time I started rereading it just after I finished the first time. it is excellent and very good. keep on .
Funny, Funny, Story. Thought I had it pegged, Jan was going to win, but before "she" accepted the Rose she called for Becca to come back and join them where "Jan" proposed to Becca thereby spilling the beans, dickwad got his comeuppance and they all lived happily ever after - but I think I like your ending better. Dang it.
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Seriously hats off to the writer. Its 1of the best story i have read here. Superb combination of romance,passion,sex and creativity. Hope to get stories like this more.
It takes a lot of work to write a story that flows so smoothly. You obviously have a lot of talent for the craft and have written a lot. Thank you for taking the time to proof read and polish this piece. The most believable story I have read on Literotica. Thank you for your time and your willingness to share with us.
I loved this story. You have prompted a confirmed lurker to make my first comment.
Well rounded characters, believable story line, and some hot sex (not too much - not that there is such a thing - but it wouldn't work in this story).
Your characters are so real they seem to breath on the page. And you make it seem easy. I am at a loss for words of praise. WOW.
As I read the story, I tried to think how it would end, or could end. Jan had to be "outed" at some point, but how? Your ending was very clever. No wonder so many readers gave it five stars. Great story!
This story was amazing. Seriously. I really cared about what was going to happen, and how everything was going to work out. It's decently written, with good grammar and really good flow, and the main character has a fun character arc and a fascinating personal dilemma. This should be made into a movie. I'm so serious. It's a quirky little romance that would work well as a film. I wish I could write the adaptation of it, make it a full-length feature.
So far, this is the best story I've read off this site. Well done.
Enjoyed the story-sounds a bit too close to reality show fodder- wonder why it has not been picked up yet...
I figured that Jason was going to say no at flower giving time. It would be because he was actually gay and doing the fake as a way of getting to be famous (much like Jan.).
He hadn't been all that into them cause he was gay and only did itt the dollars and reputation. While Jan had been faking it as a girl Jason had been faking it as a manly man. At the end we would have sensed that "Honesty is the best policy"." I DO prefer the writers version to mine though.
good work
like the comedy, wish you went deeper into the love making and deeper into jan and becca...great read though
Loved it. Would also have liked some sexy details of the interactions of Jan and Becca!
You are in a category shared by only a handful of writers. It was with regret that I could only award 5 stars. The story was outstanding, well organized, good English, and missing the typos. TV writers seldom get it this right. The ending was unexpected and excellent. I look forward to viewing your work on network TV.
I have to say this is my very first time checking out the stories in this category and I have not left here disappointed! One of the best stories I've read on here, I must say. Great ending, very well structured and incredibly humorous. 5 Stars :3
What really made me adore this story was the integrity of your characters. They lived and breathed on the page, and each interaction felt like it was real people talking with real people. My only critique would be that, for, a literotica story, it has surprisingly little sex, but meh, it's great anyway :P
10/10!
in my haste to give you a five, I did not notice that the the scores rise from the left.
I gave you an undeserved 1 for writing that had me laughing so hard that I could not see straight.
I loved it! Jan's choice for the overnight date was brilliant. Clever enough to be an honorary female. 5 *
No only a very well written and humorous story, but also a very insightful comment on so-called reality television.
I loved it.
This story was AMAZING! I have no words. Great job on this story!!
A great story, well written, with lots of twists and turns from beginning to end. I loved it from start to finish.
I wanted to rate this 5/stars but I’m new to L so I was going to hit the stars one after another ... but it locked in only the first one recording an I hated it! But the opposite is true - loved it xx
This was a lot of fun. I am a straight cis male, but I had fantasies about being able to turn into girl, and flirt with boys, since sixth grade. It was brought on by reading about Tip/Ozma in Frank L. Baum's THE MARVELOUS LAND OF OZ. It is still a day dream I have every so often, in my fifties. I am happy as a guy, and do not have gender disphoria, nor am I bi, but if I could switch genders at will, it would be an awesome super power. Your story hits just the right note for me.