by Dracthyus
Dreadful!!!! Not just the rape stuff, but the way you have written it!.. I mean,..references to..." my shitter"" and then, just 2 paragraphs down.." my hot love channel" etc. Also, lacks credibility+++.. the young man is,[ straight] and then, just gets "off" on some strange man sexually assaulting him ??? Please!!! This belongs,[ better] on Nifty forum than here.
That's the worst story I've read in a while. If there was a way to block authors so I would never see their work again, Dracthyus would have made my list this morning.
sure this is about two men. But, you would have been better off making this reluctance/nonconsent instead. It's not a very erotic gay male story. Sorry
The ending blew me away, man. You should write longer stories next time, show off more of your talent
Being no str5anger to anal I was raped by three men one night and ended in hospital with a catheter in my cock for ten days and having enemas and antibiotics becasuse I was ripped up inside, no joke. Then the aids tests, thakfully clear.
Be careful what you wish for.
i loved it unlike some of the other unknowns,
i remember getting fucked first time by a black guy after he sucked me off i really did not resist so maybe not rape since then i have to have black cock
a little rough, but I thought it was hot... would have liked more detail about the other guys fucking him
Next time, do a tad bit more of research. A major flaw in this story is that if Jim was drugged up enough on muscle relaxers to not be able to fight back; his sphincter (a muscle) would also be relaxed. In reality, he would almost be completely numb to the forced entry (physically, not mentally)
I'd like to hear about the payback Sam gets. Drugged and raped in his own house. Nobody can be watched ALL the time.
Im straight, but that is my utmost fantasy to be drugged tied up and gang raped, I can only keep wanking and hope beyond all reason that it happens to me soon!!!!!
I thought it was going to be about a guy who had sex so he could go to college or something but this first experience/rest of the story in a sentence thing is not good at all. The indefinite imprisonment is a bit much and not believable. I also agree with others who commented on the language it was not very hot and was kind of a turn off. Also this was written as a diary and more of a story than a sex scene. Concentrate on getting the sex right and then do the story development. The whole thing about quitting college was too fast and just ridiculous. Do some fucking work or go get laid because this sucks
I've noticed a lot of hating going on, but that might be because...well, when you post something like this on simple M/M, You'll get a lot of Men, who like men, Rabble raising and poking holes in logic. I will agree, might have better placed this in something more Non-consent specific than simply Gay male...
But Don't put too much thought on all the Hating. They've just got their rainbow boxers or panties in a bunch because Rape is a kind of taboo thing, and happens to a lot of men with that orientation.
Me? Knowing it was a story? Totally got my rocks off, and applaud you for that. Ignore the hate, Move the story to Taboo, and Bask in the fans you'll get. :D
Thx for the non-consent story. Loved the ending, you have talent and good instincts for story telling. There are lots of gay male forced/non-con stories, not sure what the objections here are about. Great fantasy.
Hey lil bitchboy, you made my cock so hard.... i want to fuck you so hard in your raped asshole and i want to fuck your mouth too and you swallow all my hot jizz... i want to make you my slut
I liked your story.
A guy rape is a fantasy.Guys can't help orgasming.You can feel it,a clenched arse gives it away.He spasms and you know he won't tell.
I don't know why an unwilling arse is so much fun.
Tight and unknowing.And gripping!!!
Too soon to make him a permanent slave.
You could have milked many more stories from the boy...
If you ever did.I did.
Fuck the cum out of a guy.Jail thing.it was really hot.I won't regret what his little arse felt on my dick.
Pathetic storyline and totally unbelievable.
"I shot on his stomach and chest as he pumped me full of his hot cum."
Impossible as he had his legs tied over his head so he would have cum on his own chest.
To write decent stories you need a bit of intelligence. You don't have that luxury.
Suck my cock first…and get it nice and wet so I can ram it in balls deep on the first thrust.