looks like a peak into a disaster. 5stars good stuff. watching for the desaster forshadowing three different directions this could go in. two of which are sad
The chapters are a little on the short side — Lit. pages seem to be six or seven MS Word (or whatever word processor you're using) pages per page.
But as far as the story goes, it is moving right along, plenty of action, enough details for us to get the picture of this family in crisis. Well written, no obvious issues, with good dialog. (Probably some small typos and that sort of thing, but EVERYONE has those. lol!)
Looking forward to future chapters!
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