by Alexandra
Ending is abrupt and silly. If they really cared so much for each other, they would try to work things out.
Hi Alex, Don't think I've read you before. I really enjoyed this story (yes, including THAT way!) The ending for me was actually quite authentic - I'm just glad I came before then... Keep it going and good luck! Feel free to check out some of mine too if you like... Ciao ciao.
Great story, well written and made me smile, turned me on and a little sad at the end. Bravo.
Great read! I completely understand the ending. The story and the sex scenes were perfect. Keep writing.
Your stories are much more like great stories that have great sex than stories about sex. They also have an autobiographical feel - if they're not true they have a feel of being true.
This story would merit a sequel (if you haven't already written one). Leaving two such good people out of the narrator's life is a shame. Even if no group sex were involved it would be good to see how these people had managed the event. Hopefully their relationship wasn't forever ruined.
While this story is somewhat "real", I do take exception with one major point.
I have never seen nor heard of an Aussie male cry just because he missed out on a root.
It might be different if Essendon lose to Footscray, or the Storm lose to The Raiders, or Fosters has an explosion and its a dry weekend. That could possibly cause a wee bit of eye leakage. But just missing out on a bit on the side, nah, never. Not going to happen.
For all that it is a well written story. 5 stars.