by Alex De Kok
A good read, the ending made me smile. Thank you for posting this.
Maybe the ending was a bit rushed but you did make the deadline. I enjoyed the concept of the mutual respect between an adult child and the parent. Although others may gripe that there was nothing to get the juices flowing I found the story to be erotic and very appropriate for the contest. Thanks for writing.
hardly anything would get done. But you succeeded before the last minute, and wrote a great story. At least 5*--maybe more. Great story and good luck in the contest.
Great story, well deserving of the 5 *'s. I just wish you could extend the story, showing more or Brad and Mary's future together, and the results of the photo contest.
Congrats.
He fell in love with her over the course of a photo shoot?
Seems pretty shallow, even for LitE.
I really enjoy finding one of your stories and this was no exception. Yes, it could have been longer but I understand deadlines. Please do a follow-up and let us know how the pictures were received and what happend to mother and daughter. You really left things open for a sequel.
I fell in love with Mary and Brad. Sally and Kenny are so cute together. I will look for this writer again and again. If this was his version of short I can not wait to read his longer ones. If he were to write a book I would be the first in line to purchase it. Thank you so much for such a loving erotic story.
it is a baseball game, not a baseball match. It is a soccer match, not a soccer game....minor issues but a distraction
for your Game/Match comments. Another example of two nations divided by a common language!
Alex
Well done You captured Family relationships that i hadn't thought of for a while with . Along with the growing love between young couples searching out the way to live and be in a relationship. Then you developed the lost love of my life reentering Wonderful !