by GatorRick
I never expected this kind of story on Literotica. Very powerfully and emotionally written. Thank you!
Nice to read a warm loving story. A good romance story doesn't need all the sex to make it great reading. Keep up the good work.
You are a wonderful writer and I look forward to your next story!
Alan
It was as good as the first one. I will read the rest of your stories. Thank you for writing.
Such Good Story has to be expected from the author as has been the case of all other stories which I had the opportunity to read in the last few days. Hope continuation of the trend in all future works as well. KEEP IT UP. WISHING ALL THE BEST.
Your stories are really touching and make a great read. Can't wait for the next one!
Rick, you seem to have taken to heart the major criticism that I have seen, that of trying too hard and rushing your story. a much better paced and developed story, well worth 5 stars
Read all your stories to date and 1 thing that stands out is all the dead parents by car accidents,lol.
I've observed that the people who read our stories here are looking for perfection, as a respite from the disappointments of real life. I can't think of a more perfect example than this story. Every aspect of it puts the reader's mind at ease. I could feel my mood improving with every paragraph. Not only that: the grammar, word usage, and spelling were perfect all the way through, which made the reading go smoothly. I enjoyed the story tremendously, and I'll re-read it every time I need a refresher course to improve my own writing.
I read this story a few months ago. This second reading was just as enjoyable as the first time.
Well I see I read this story for the second time almost a year ago. It is still a very entertaing tale.
I really like your non erotic and delightful romance stories.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com
You nailed this one. Great story and it goes to show you how a non erotic story is an excellent romantic story! Thanks Rick.. Love you all! Bye. Greg.
I'm commenting on this story, but my comment applies to you and not just this story. This the third of yours that I've read and I really like your style and your stories. Now I like erotica as much as the next guy, but sometime it's just too much. Your work stands on it own with out excessive sex, just good writing and good topicsw. All the best to you man.
Thad
No wasted words in this excellent story! Romantic ,with a dose of patriotism,makes for good reading! Well done! A 5+
What a great piece of story telling. Outstanding!!! Looking forward to reading more of your well-crafted stories. SF VET
I have only one quibble with this good story. A Marine does not salute indoors unless he is under arms, as Patrick would not be in his home. Other than that, it's a great tale. Semper Fi!
This was more of a love at first sight type of story. I like it. Keep it up.
Events in the real world should be as wonderful!
A short and sweet story that is a joy to experience!
Well written and well done,GatorRick!
But then I haven’t read anything of GatorRick’s that I didn’t love. Or at least, like, a lot. This one is definitely a Five Star effort.
Unusually great for a short story.
From reading this and One Man's Heart (which is better only because it is longer with more time to develop plot and characters), I'm beginning to think that GatorRick ranks up in the stratospheric atmosphe with Tony155, another great Literotica romance writer. Cat5 is another.
Another heart-touching story with interesting side scenarios beside the main romantic plot, namely Patrick relating how Rick saved his life, and also the clash with bully Brian.
Just like One Man's Heart has some overdone parts (Rick having special parking access wherever, MK's dad with largest northern Florida Ford dealer, the coincidence of Patrick meeting his savior captain in his parents' living room) -- but, hey, these just added to the flavor of the story.
Admiringly,
Paul in Oklahoma
Have all the Mann fathers died before their sons get married. Why else would the mothers be handing over their engagement rings?
It's obviously cursed, at least for the men of the family. Rick somehow dodged a major bullet (pun intended) when he survived Afghan. I could just see him leaving from the Doctors Office after getting a clean Bill of Health, stepping off the curb to cross the road to the parking lot and getting wiped out by a Bus.
Rick's parents died at the same time. I suspect the women passed on the ring because they were still wearing it so they took it off to pass to their adult sons.
A beautiful tradition carrying with it the prayers and best wishes of the couples passing it on.!
Such a great story in only 2 pages. I first read this on YouTube before it was taken down when the site was terminated. This was prior to my reading anything on Literotica. I assume YouTube frowns on people posting copyrighted material as their own. I hope this posting doesn't disappear as I plan on sending the URL to friends. Definitely 5 Stars CC
Loved it, wonderful to see young couples meet and suddenly know they are meant for each other.
The word that comes to mind is "trite". I know this is indeed fantasyland and all sorts of things happen when you fantasize. But there wasn't a minute of tension; not a blip in their relationship. The author tried with the preop scene at the hospital, but we all knew it would be OK. 3* for "feel-good" few minutes.
Much better character building than another story i read of you ( finding love). Five x for this one. Tiny detail: in several stories you consistently keep refering to a conversation as a 'conservation'. So consistently in fact, that it doesn't bother me cuz i got used to it! ;-))
Pretty nice story, regardless of what some commenters may think. I do question one thing: Near the end of the story Rick says he is resigning his commission in the Marine Corps. If he’s still in the Marines, why is he being treated at the VA. He should be getting treated at a Navy hospital. The VA hospital, as far as I know, is for veterans, not active duty or reserve personnel. It certainly doesn’t affect the quality of the story, it’s just something that made me wonder. I think this one is a Five Star story, I like fantasy.
Great story- one of the best I’ve read on Literotica. Great plot and description and flow