All Comments on 'The Neglected Son Ch. 01'

I loved this story! It was so well written, with such a good plot! I hope there's more, becase I am REALLY looking forward to seeing it. I can't wait to see what happens next!

Gosh, the first time I look at this story in a while and there's a brand-new comment! Thank you!

-- Sabledrake

I can't imagine it getting any better. Your style and flair for writing is unparalled except for those who do it professionally. Maybe it's something you should consider. It's not often you find a diamond in the rough, but yours certainly does shine. Anyways, thanks for the awesome read and I look forward to reading more from you.

I just finished your story, and I think that it's great. The way he takes the opertunity to get a great lay, get pictures and movie of it all. I can't wait to read the next installment.

This whole series is so deliciously evil, and practically drips poetic justice. Not to mention the quality of the writing. I've cum many times to some of the choicer passages. ;)

This looks like it is going to be a very good 'get even' story. I hope that family gets everything that's coming to them.

Great story!

I hope you write it to where he just shocks the hell out of everyone. The real topper would be if he bangs Mindy's mother before she finds out who he really is. That would be killing 3 birds with one stone. Keep it up (no pun intended).

This story feels like my deepest most extreme desire! you are letting me experience the way I feel - and the revenge I crave towards my father , and my sisters.

A well thought out and provocative piece of writing. Excellent back story and the passion is both intense and timely.

You are a writer with style.

I love revenge erotica. You are a master.

It... is not a juicy, bang hard, detailed sexnovel - more of a nuclear revenge.

if (not all) sexscenes had been visualised, it would have got higher score.

such as building up and making her sub.

Dom. her - tease in school, make her mad of desire, using her with rough deepthroat until she pass out, going anal, stepping up every now and then... to make her truely his.

but i guess that is just for wish for ;)

Why so much “head talk”? Every move by the girl and we had to have a complete rundown of dudes emotions and thoughts and why he felt it and what it meant. A little is fine but tell us a story. It has good possibilities.

great start

Hmm @SableDrake - some of your your story tags are too ambiguous. Lean more towards category related (e.g. incest, sister; even 'neglected' produces themes). Best approach is to do a test run on your choices and determine best results.

Apart from that minor aspect, story is good.