All Comments on 'Subway Girl Ch. 01'

A great start and I'm looking forward to reading more. Thank you for sharing.

I'm really enjoying this. It's quite an original storyline.

HUGS

I quite enjoy the beggining of this story. I hope there will be more !

Its a wonderful story.Its innocent,simple and crisp.It has no artificial embellishments but rather very honest and from the heart.

Thank you for writing it.

Jiya C.

decent writing, and a real story.

this story really struck a sensitive never for me.. I know how important hugs are for people. It seems like such a small thing that can make such a big difference in a person's life. And so I appreciate you writing the story and I hope you continue it.

Absolutely loved reading this! Cannot wait for more!

YAWN! Gave up half way down the fist page.

What a gorgeous story. Simply told, no artifice, building the characters. More, please.

I like the way that you showed us who the main character currently is and teased us with the impact that the hugs were having. I'm looking forward to seeing what develops going forward and the impact that it has on both of them.

Enjoyed the difference...enjoyed the build up...just plain enjoyed it!

Now to read on

I'm new to this series. Favorably impressed is putting it mildly. How you managed to get inside the head of somebody just one tiny step up from homeless and destitute is unfathomable. The taglines all say that this is "a story about love and redemption." I am delighted to be along for the ride.

In addition, I give you high marks for technical correctness and accuracy. Good grammar, spelling, punctuation, and syntax -- the combination is sadly rare among Literotica authors.

Finally, ignore the naysayers!

Its so brilliant that i feel like i am the main character... Keep it up you have the credentials of a great writer

Thank you for writing. I am looking forward to this work.

5*

Best regards,

Pultoy

gave it a 5

I needed an escape today and your story is just that. Your writing is masterful and I can feel the sweet pull of expectation you created for your central character. Very well done.

Curious and captivating first chapter. I believe I will like this.

Amazing truly amazing

I have patience

Good start 5

Your on 5 stars so far. After reading Flower Girl I hope this story as a better ending...

As smooth an opening as I have seen, The central character is layered already.

I'm reading for the second time and it still feels amazing.

want to know more

while asking who in the heck she is

wow, what a start!

I just read the first chapter this story - it is 5 stars and I predict 5 stars for the rest as well

I’m late to the party. I love the simple crispness of the story and the perspective. I read something else of yours that was better written (technically speaking). It seems like you wrote it first in present tense then switched most of it to past tense. That’s the only explanation I can see for the constant verb tense switching going on. It’s good enough to keep me reading so thank you for creating and sharing!

lovely story, good english!

Enjoying the story.

I have read the series of subway girl all the way through, it is a great story and great writing.

Excellent. So impressive in its detail and psychology. I was impressed how it was left 'hanging' at the end, for the reader's imagination. So many cannot leave the initial good idea alone, and cannot rest until every possible sexual position and method has been described for the nth time. KEEP IT UP!

Good start, neat and to the point.

Empathetic Emo. What isolated handicapped people.