I really enjoyed the poem, and your voice is perfect for it. I felt the reading, however, was too rushed....
Same old story? I agree about the lines quoted by 12, though. And I like this one, too: "tying my mind...
If I were permitted to play with this one I would change 'mouldable' to mailable for the layers of meaning...
The last for lines save this from mediocrity. If the rest were as good it would be at least a 4 and...
Loved the lines...
raise a glass to procrastination
And clink to that somnolent state
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