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Short Sweet & Sensual
by mmmmsexy ©
senses
sensual
sensuous
sensitive
sensing I would like to use ALL my
senses to explore ALL of you
scent mmmmmmmm
scrumptious!
sumptuous
situation suggests sharing sexy scenarios
stately shaft sliding into slick
slippery softness
sensational!
share some?
ssssshhhhhh
secret.
Can someone say Deju Vu? I couldn’t find a new #1 so here I go the new poems list. Untill there is a new # 1, I will turn my gaze toward those who have walked, stalked or lurched into the frey most recently. I begin at the bottom of the list…
Okay it sure has a lot of S’s and it does build toward a sort of coherent thought.
Perhaps the idea of using all your senses should have been explored in the poem. You know sight, sound and touch etc.
I get the feeling at times we almost get there but the love of the 19th letter of the alphabet gets in the way.
The abundance of words that begin with s provides no rhythm that is pleasing to say and in trying so hard to be slever I mean clever the poem loses it soul.
The use of ALL CAPS in the first stanza does elevate the sound and power of the sentiment but is unnecessary there is little to shout about.
And the mmmmmmm inserted in the poem is a trademark of sorts the artist works this into most of her poems. If one is sufficiently whimsical you can almost imagine this being read by a Dr. Seuss character.
To see something of potential in the artist try reading,
“Waking You…The Hard Way.”
U.P.
Sublimely slithering softly, sadly silently...
by mmmmsexy ©
senses
sensual
sensuous
sensitive
sensing I would like to use ALL my
senses to explore ALL of you
scent mmmmmmmm
scrumptious!
sumptuous
situation suggests sharing sexy scenarios
stately shaft sliding into slick
slippery softness
sensational!
share some?
ssssshhhhhh
secret.
Can someone say Deju Vu? I couldn’t find a new #1 so here I go the new poems list. Untill there is a new # 1, I will turn my gaze toward those who have walked, stalked or lurched into the frey most recently. I begin at the bottom of the list…
Okay it sure has a lot of S’s and it does build toward a sort of coherent thought.
Perhaps the idea of using all your senses should have been explored in the poem. You know sight, sound and touch etc.
I get the feeling at times we almost get there but the love of the 19th letter of the alphabet gets in the way.
The abundance of words that begin with s provides no rhythm that is pleasing to say and in trying so hard to be slever I mean clever the poem loses it soul.
The use of ALL CAPS in the first stanza does elevate the sound and power of the sentiment but is unnecessary there is little to shout about.
And the mmmmmmm inserted in the poem is a trademark of sorts the artist works this into most of her poems. If one is sufficiently whimsical you can almost imagine this being read by a Dr. Seuss character.
To see something of potential in the artist try reading,
“Waking You…The Hard Way.”
U.P.
Sublimely slithering softly, sadly silently...