All Comments on '6000 feet'

whats not to love about this POV? senna the cynical, poet whose poems I miss, yeah, I said it, I miss'em :)

First poem I've read of yours that actually

held my attention.

I think it would have better impact with

punctuation. I know the reasons you

chose for ignoring it purposely.

That said, I think this particular poem

would work better with it.

The reason I say that is specifically

pauses. Some lines when read across

feel like they are meant to be read

smooth and quick. In this poem

I believe commas, in the right places.

would improve the poem from the

readers seat.

I did really appreciate the cigarette

butt reference.

Surprise, surprise!

best,

andy

I enjoyed enjoyed the literary journey of your words. A restless and beautiful poem.

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