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Click hereCold, hard, accusations
aimed with jagged barbs,
Lodged in my memory
as subconscious thoughts,
Openly friendly, playing nice,
a great facade,
Inwardly seething, bleeding
rivers of unshed tears.
j.b
It's all about hiding your feelings. Beautiful thoughts on human development.
Now this was very striking and I truly felt the pain of the poetry. Though no object centered this poem, It made a point of interest in the very personal tragedy! And you used a very bitter image with the pointed barb's! Made a very fine abstraction of introversion through suffering!
Now this was very striking and I truly felt the pain of the poetry. Though no object centered this poem, It made a point of interest in the very personal tragedy! And you used a very bitter image with the pointed barb's! Made a very fine abstraction of introversion through suffering!
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This poem is weighed down with adjectives. Cut out most of them, then rewrite with good nouns and verbs. No gerund verbs either if you can help it because they weaken poetry.