by erectus123
brev it teee
i.e.
what do i have to wade through to get to a good ending
didn't vote
sorry it wasn't brief enuff but it is a ballad and they tend to run longer
(nothing personal) but on second thought it seems to me
Brevity is not a really a legit comment, tell me the poem is shit, merd, vomit, or a real comment that proves you actually real the tripe. It doesn’t help me to get one-word comments; does it help you? I am happy for criticism. As a devote of the son-nut you would appreciate the poems of Shake-a-spear, the great indigenous Australian aborigine poet, who wrote sonnets on caca-nut shells and was thus criticized, commented that his poems were brief because the shell wasn’t large enough for a long one, and God knows a long one is desired at certain times. Anyway, happy Val day just the same, cause all of us have something of value, no need to hide it, just shout it.
I find your story line extremely creative and spot on in accuracy. The ballad speaks for itself and probably will only ring true with old souls or older humans who have experienced the rarity of true love and the occasional 'fuck of the century' scenario. Very creative and a pleasure to share my thoughts.