All Comments on 'a sharp poem'

you have thrown a handful of pine needles into the fire of literotica. with a crack and a burst hope you have many hands and a big pile from which to throw

I initially wanted to call the vertical edge a bit gimmicky, but no, after reading the poem... it works. Few words but deadly intent... well done.

jim : )

Tight and taut with a 'gimmick' that works.

I enjoyed the literary journey of your words. A bit of a different format.

Combining a 'playful' sensibility (as shown by the 'image' of a razor) with dark even ominous feelings, is not an easy concoction to swallow; thus the edgy quality. But hey, who needs plateaus in poetry?