by seranade
loved the idea of an angel's kiss
is that what happens when I get chills?
Shivers, very interesting.
great poem L~
especially in the first stanza. I also liked your rhyme pairs there, so much I wished you carried the rhyme throughout the poem. The final stanza picked up the rhyme scheme, but lacked the intensity of interest the first stanza created. It was as if you ran out of energy, which may have been intended intimating some fatigue, but it seems the angel's kiss would bolster the strength here.
The alliteration was carried through the poem with sucess, but again, with just a bit less of impact as you created in the first stanza. This is a good poem, with some potential to be even better. Set it aside for awhile and look at it in a few weeks or so and see what you think.
jim : )
A lovley kiss for a prince perhaps...
I love this poem.
A lil dark mystery, added to which.. an angels kiss...
More please~