- Non-Erotic Poetry
- apart
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he is waiting
he always waits
he is wanting
he always wants
his wants crush my needs
his needs crush my wants
the page is turning
we grow apart
yes, for a time
we grew together
it wasn’t all shit
the shit that it was
grew a daisy
but now
we grow apart
he gave me what it was I needed then
but now I need things he cannot give me
it’s not his fault
it’s not my fault
it’s not your fault
it’s just how life shook out
now it’s time to grow
apart
to part
and to grow
taking the memories
of the good
leaving the footprints
of the bad
and just be
be in the future
where his needs and wants
can’t bring me down
where I open my own wings
and fly
- COMMENTS
erectus123about 11 years agoaccurate description of life, loving and the leaving, the growing apart , Well done. Thomas Wolfe said "You can't go home again" and that is generally the case, when you try you find the house is a wreck. Rebuilding on a weak foundation rarely works and the flood will always destroy it when it inevitably comes. When a relationship is good it is good, when it is not little will use to explain why they throw away their lives, what they do not realize is that the children suffer too. It takes great courage to break away....
As for a comment on the technical aspects, I might suggest eliminating these redundant lines "where his needs and wants
can’t bring me down"
and going right to the conclusion you state so well although the image (wings-flying) is apt but somewhat trite due to its overuse in songs and common expression, might there be another form of release and escape for our heroine?
