All Comments on 'At My Command'

Very nice D/s piece but it struck me that by writing this in present tense, rather than past tense, you could have a more powerful scene:<P>

<Br>At My command

<Br>you obey without question,

<Br>give all that you have

<Br>to please Me.<P>

<Br>At My command

<Br>you endure pain,

<Br>endure pleasure.

<Br>All at my command.<P>

Present tense is the more active voice; play with it in the rest of the piece and see how more powerful the image becomes.