All Comments on 'Be Moderate Where Pleasure is ...'

Creative use of fonts, the mind, emotions, and witty desires. Greatly enjoyed thank you

Du Lac~

Very original structure which simultaneously captures the different observations, points of view and sensations throughout. Nicely done!

I'm not sure of the protocol for adding comments to your own work, but thought the readers might like to know a bit of the background.

This experiment in three voices began while waiting for a fried chicken dinner at Cable's restaurant. I wanted to explore different ways to distinguish each narrator, from number of lines to font attributes to phrasing style, while still telling the story in sequence with minimal redundancy.

Since I'm the author I'd planned to leave the ratings unchecked, but it's a required field. If enough people vote, my own entry won't skew the figures too badly.

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