All Comments on 'Black Hills of South Dakota'

I liked the change in line length. It kept the rhyme scheme from lulling me into drowsiness. Or maybe it's the coffee. This is a good poem. Full of imagery and interest. Try embedding your rhymes into lines through different line breaks that use enjambment of one thought into the next. Doing so will change the flow of your voice into something more speech-like. That's just a thought. Thanks for sharing.

on a second read, I found your enjambments. I apologize. They would be more evident if you didn't break your lines at each rhyme and got rid of the caps at the beginning of them all. If Word insists on adding capitals at a hard enter, you can turn the feature off at the tools options bar, auto-correct button.

the title as the first character of each line. What's impressive it that you were still able to make each line a key part of the visual image you were portraying.

I enjoyed reading this.

Regards, Jack

I apologize yet again for not recognizing the form. This is an especially good poem when read in this new light.

Sincerely, Carrie.

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