All Comments on 'Chasing Love'

The second stanza is my favorite. Wonderful image. In my opinion, knock out the 'the' in the first line. It will unify the whole piece.

...strong. Here is yet another growing voice demanding everyone's attention, a poet whose work needs to be read by all.

Start again, saving only the second stanza.

The rest is very common and greatly overused.

The last line was a song.

I liked it, though it's not as strong as some of your other offerings.

Thank you to everyone who commented on the original version of the poem. Although it's taken me awhile, I've finally edited it enough that I felt it was time to resubmit it. PLEASE comment (positive or negative comments)! I appreciate all comments, and as I hope you may notice, I do listen to them, see *points at edited poem*!

But I love this!!

I think you've done a brilliant job creating the illusion.

I'll have to keep an eye out for more of your stuff!! ;-)

*Tender talent leaving me breathless* ~ I just love this line. So much imagery, and emotion. This poem packs a punch, feeling it throughtout the whole body. Saddness, and yet love. Wonderful..More Please~!!!!!!

Love's magician will saw your soul's heart in half ~ only this is a cut that hurts!