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buttersbuttersalmost 12 years ago
this fills up my senses

sleepslow fingers? perfect

paced contemplatively, ripe with offerings of sound, colour, movement, passion and bitter dark chocolate afternotes - typo 'girls' but to be fair you had me at 'sleepslow fingers'. also the 'sandy cartwheels', 'shaky vernacular', 'indonesian dockside bags/cascading beans' and the mother hushing the child 'far inland'.

i love this write and so must favourite it. great job!

AzaleaAzaleaabout 12 years ago

Dude, this is great stuff......I love the ending:

"I remember

how your steam

deep and rich

at weary dawn

rolled into my nostrils

(I breathed you so deeply,

a gulping, starving man)

and revived

my parched

heavy head."

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I'm green. Like a lush forest. I love hiking, biking, rain, interesting religious ideas, big trees, books, art, design, poetry, spicy food, liberal politics, quirky movies. And sex. I like that, too. Hobbies: Helping babygirl learn important things.