by SeattleRain
I love the imagery and taste. I think your third and fourth stanzas are the strongest of the whole poem-- they pulled me right in. Reminds me of those nights in October when I'm melting sugar into caramel for apples. Leave the stuff go to long and it gets ruined :)
Xtaabay
this poet seems comfortable making readers twitch.
like knowing how simple it is to amaze, so delicate an art
even flung paints dripping to the commands of chance ripped off.
I do like it ... raw, delectable.
Left me seared, uncertain if more over your words here than my imaginations over the woman who wrote them.
I read your comment on my "It's a Bug's Life" piece and had to read something of yours. You out-do me by a heap, girl! Well done. And with regards to your question about forest being in quotes, well i actually was in the forest when I wrote it, but the forest was a typical southern california forest, with not many trees, more deserty. Back-East girl, I am. You're the second person to comment on the quotes, so I will remove them. And work on something else today, fueled by people reading and COMMENTING (good or bad) on what I do.
ever eat roasted marshmellows with my kids again! Yikes! Well done, understated, "controled".