by demure101
wanting to B cumming after the courtin" is done, TK U MLJ LV NV
You don't follow the rhyming rules to make it a full sonnet - not that that is the paramount consideration necessarily. Part of the craft of the sonnet is fitting your thoughts to a pre-designed verse structure - yours moves away from true Italian sonnet form and does not fit any other variant. Sweet O.
...of the poems by Christopher Marlowe and Sir Walter Raleigh -- "The Passionate Shepherd to His Love" and "The Nymph's Reply to the Shepherd". :)