All Comments on 'Cut Away At This Existance'

Dark and overpowering;

Would work better by breaking it into strophes

Could better control the flow of emotions;

Here as is, they all seem to run together

Becoming {as I said} overpowering, thereby weakening it.

Thank you for creating this poem.

Although I could not identify myself with your situations at such a young age of 10, I have been feeling the same madness and helpless of my self-imprisonment. I'd been struggling to put down all of these clashing emotions and yearnings onto paper as mental therapeutic from the course of self-destruction that I am walking toward, but I don't have the talent to make words come alive in a poem.

I would love to have a copy of this poem because reading it seems to slowly release these destructive feelings.

You did a wonderful job with the poem, especially, because you didn't make your poem rhyme in anyway and it's still clearly flow with your emotions.