- Erotic Poetry
- Dance with Me
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Dance with Me
Across the cosmic oceans of time and space
Come dance with me in our dream world place
Hand in hand as we move with the rhythm of falling rain
Simply enjoying one another and forgetting life's pain
Gliding across sunsets clouds and a rainbows mist
Our feet floating like balloons as in the breeze we twist
Eyes gazing deeply searching for secrets of the soul
As mystery and magic manifest a Salsa's flirtatious cajole
Under moon and stars we fluidly move with whimsical delight
Exploring wants, needs, and desires throughout each special night
I love when the moon glow shimmers through your flowing hair
Making my heart skip a beat as we tango without a single care
The synergies of our bodies act like a magnets pull to be held appressed
Slow dancing upon a comet's tail crossing the full moons crest
Electricity flowing fully charged as our hands are held pleasantly tight
Creating sparks seen as falling stars from other worlds in orbital flight
Vivid kaleidoscopes arrays fill our fantasies with the blessings of hope
With an intuitive knowing that our friendship allows us to cope
Then when the raindrops stops falling our dance evolves into sweet bliss
We make love in the Heavens until our next dance begins with a kiss
An Original Composition by:
Quivering Quill
A Scribbles & Doodles Creation
All Rights Reserved
- COMMENTS
Quivering_Quillabout 11 years agoAuthorI really appreciate everyone's comments and opinions. I am honored that you have taken the time to provide comments.
erectus123about 11 years ago1.sunsets clouds and a rainbows mist-- minor typo should be possessives sunset's,rainbow's
2.very nice lines:
Eyes gazing deeply searching for secrets of the soul
As mystery and magic manifest a Salsa's flirtatious cajole
3.the first line is really nice, second is weak, perhaps continue in 1st person:
I love when the moon glow shimmers through your flowing hair
Making my heart skip a beat as we tango without a single care
4.lovely line. makes other pale in the 4 verses, also typo possessive-magnet's pull
.Slow dancing upon a comet's tail crossing the full moons crest
5. The last three lines,do not compare with the first line
My friend, it is much harder to write beautiful poems than ballads, you are doing well but poems of this level require much honing, persist as you have the talent to make every line as strong as the next
lonelyhousewife32about 11 years agoAs a woman, and a novice at poetry, I thought it was beautiful. Sometimes the message means more than the words, even in poetry. Yeah, the flow isn't great and the lines don't quite line up, but a fancy picture is painted and I appreciate the chance to see it.
twelveooneabout 11 years agokaleidoscopes, 3rd time around?
cosmic oceans, synergies, Electricity
bum trip for me, or maybe it's the fact that rhyming couplets are inherently boring, get rid of the fuzz box for the guitar and play it straight
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