All Comments on 'Dark Destiny'

Eerie poem, even more eerie illustration. I can sense the darkness closing in.

This objection might be very subjective, but I don't see the point in using "o'er" and "e'er" instead just speiing them out. Since I don't quite know how to pronounce them, I get stalled and stumble on those lines.

I find the illustration so dark on my screen that I cannot tell what it is

and thus it does not add to the poem for me.

The author uses darkness as a metaphor for destiny.

Most of the phrases are not new,

but the poem is structurally sound

except for the second strophe where the rhyme fails

because "vice" should probably be "vise "

(and even then it is a strained rhyme)

and the contractions do sound a bit contrived,

even if needed to preserve the eight syllable line count.

Wow, Dampy! That last thought sent shivers up my neck. The illustration is very nice and the mood of the poem is tied in nicely. Good work.

~lucky

I wish I could write poetry...

I liked it a lot...

Brian

The darkness of deceit and lies ~ darkness has descended and we are always aware that destiny has a way of catching up with all of us. Photo illustration is certainly appropriate.

knows, what lurks around every dark corner...

It all works well, evoking a feel of dark despair.

will fate step in. TK U MLJ LV NV