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tammi, tammi, tammi...

Do you realize that there isn't one line in this poem that isn't a recycled phrase? Putting them all together in the form you chose is interesting. Yes, it is a functional poem, it works, but those things have been said so many times, in exactly the same way, although not the same structure, that it almost feels plagiaristic. Of course, I know it isn't, but when reading this poem it does give you a sense of the deja vous. Suggestion, possibly take each line of this poem and rewrite it in a way that makes the point but uses imagery to portray the feeling instead of stating the exact feeling straight out? That might be an interesting plan of attack and I'd love to see what you come up with.

Extremely talented and poetic