by seannelson
than a true poem. Perhaps you can expand it and submit it under reviews and essays? Could be a potentially powerful piece!
I must agree to an extent. . . it is full of powerful images, but it does not seem fully developed "poetically", whatever that may be. I see great potential here, but I wouldn't essay it, I'd assay it and save the gold. Put this one aside for awhile and come back to it with a critical eye. It will be worth the effort.
(I don't use the thermometer.)
I very much enjoyed reading this. I think it is a fine fantastic piece of poetry and look forward to hearing from you more about it!