by EveHasFallen
4 foot iambic lyric poetry is great. lots of poets use it. but once you start on it, with meter and rhyme in a good form, you should stick to it. when you violate the form it makes you look lazy and distracts the reader. poetry takes discipline. you are inventive enough. so???
I LOVE this poem!! Seriously, Eve, you need to be published in the worst way! Your stories and your poetry are amazing! Thanks for sharing them with us!!
If you are not a lawyer - you should consider being one...
But you are wrong on one key point. Eve has not fallen, she has elevated herself and us all from the equivalent of satisfied pigs (a-la J.S Mill’s famous aphorism) to humanity... Thank you Eve! <P>
Nope, creation as left to us by the (surely all males) editors of the bible(s) versions was not a plain level field for Eve... So for god to cry fowl after Eve stirred the first revolution of the underclass (so what if there were only two rebels?), dragging Adam by his ... nose I guess, to a culinary orgy - I'd say: Hip Hip Hooray to Eve! And: Boo Hoo to that version of power grabbing autocrat god who kicked them humans out of his glorified ranch! Now see how that great garden looks nowadays, somewhere in the midst of Iraq...
at times and I agree, maybe he should have started out brand new.
A fun little write with a different perspective on the tale of Adam and Eve.