All Comments on 'False Ambrosia'

I liked the title so much I read through the entire poem, even though I had a hard time figuring out what you were trying to say. Your own explanation of the poem helped-- we have all been in your situation, looking for a clear focus, etc.

In my humble opinion, I think that you should go to where that title took YOU. You do not have to say everything to TLT (?) in one poem., There is a lifetime of poems to say all that. Just pick one thing and make us feel it. Please try to avoid cliches like raking down the back-- can you say something that makes us FEEL what that feels like? Without actually saying it? Not easy. Maybe not even this poem.

I dare you to write a poem, False Ambrosia redux. 10 lines max. Show us what is false about the ambrosia. one simple thing. One Simple Thing is always the biggest, most complex.

Go go go , come on, I really really want to read a wonderful beautiful, condensed, essential (ha haha how many more words can I use telling you to condense! Lol) wonderful poem by the person who came up with that title.

Please!

The word is forever more. The poem left me speechless. The story was entertaining. You are a very talented writer.