All Comments on 'From the marshes to the sea'

Avoid, reword

whispering = the ing sound here is actually conterproductive

i.e.

Eerie fog clothes the reeds

in secret whispers

or something like that

100

I think I agree with 1201 about "whispering" and not sure I'd keep "soundlessly" as "muffled" already suggests that to me, but maybe you want the alliteration there? That single rhyme seems just right to me and the other pairings that use assonance (reeds/secrets) or just similar sounds (wreckers/breakers) work really well, too. Oh and is "Harriers" possessive? Does it need an apostrophe? Not sure, maybe just a plural name... xo

I have a soft spot for a good maritime poem, and this captures a lot of the coastal feeling and special mystique.

I'd probably trim away the "Eerie" in the beginning, or replace it with something more physically descriptive and less value adding. You don't have to tell the reader about the spookyness of the imagery, it is perfectly shown as it is.

It's a cool poem. Got 100 from me and a recommend.

Good atmosphere poem but possibly too many words. It would be still work perhaps without eerie, their, hungry, ships, soundlessly,long, warning.

"Lured to the rocky shore" bugs a bit because I find it hard to imagine marshes and dunes with rocks- my problem! where's a geomorpologist when they're needed?