by twelveoone
I think the words could flow together a bit more.
Sad ending for your hero.
Grim, but good. I agree with the previous comment. I also felt the first and second stanzas could have been better linked, but I liked it.
for a deeper meaning in your work and sometimes I do find it. Other times, I seek meaning where none was intended. You are an enigma, a cloudburst on a sunny horizon. Glad you have returned, for whatever length of time that may be.
I've been told that if it wasn't for caffine, I'd have no personality at all. Not sure what that has to do with anything, but it seemed to go here. Ditto what normal jean said about you being back.