All Comments on 'Her Confession of Betrayal'

in particular, I liked:

She spoke in a tone that was quiet and cold

Explaining a betrayal not twelve hours old

You've got a good handle on conveying meaning, though I think you ran a bit long, overall and (as I've been saying over and again, today) I think the rhyme scheme left some of your lines feeling forced and stilted. I think you have potential, as a poet and would benefit greatly from reading others' work, as it would expose you to different ways of expressing yourself. T.S. Eliot and Charles Bukowski are two excellent places to start. Bukowski writes a lot about watching girls walk away, and the general pain of life (which this poem identifies with.)

If you have any questions, or wanna tell me to go fuck myself for criticizing you, feel free to drop me a PM anytime.

~D.A.

This is not a simple topic to be glossed over. You showed the pain well. This would make a great short story!

Very well done.

I love how honest you are....I love that you could put it into words so well said..... :)