by My Erotic Tale
Art, you growth and reach amazes me
Two suggestions on this:
Do something about overuse of stock images.
This would benefit from constructive use of spacing, i.e.
time(blank s p a c e) spin
Wonderful thought provoking and inspiring work Art... your versitile spirit soars.. I would only break it into stanzas when the questions stop and the answers begin.. leave a second there for the power to sink into the mind of the reader..
Loved it..
Du~
re: my favorite part..
I have Higher hopes
but read the signs
mother natures crying
dinosaur size tears
what will be
in another 10 million years?
That is the sensei we all know amd love, nice work art, but I agree it could use some division/breaks I'll send the site by e-mail that shows structures and reasoning, breaks and why. This was a nice intellegent poem you have created here. I am not being (picky) it's just that a nice poem deserves an EXTRA touch.
Your Nin :)
This poem immediately touched me. Thank you for your neverending talents...You are amazing....
a flash in the flames...brilliant...better that than jumping from the fryer into the skillet..title was fitting all around good pen...thanks....blue