All Comments on 'In the Midst of the Moment'

this rolled off the mind ..so fluid like a gentle wave...nice/blue

Liked the way you captured this moment.

A very nice ebb and flow!

Fly

A very gentle moment

til his words,

like waves crashing,

washes all away...

I was going to say that the "call of galls" phrase seems to stick out as the only (unintentional?)rhyme and then it suddenly hit me...did you mean to say "gulls" ??

is a moment ever lost

when we plant time bombs

dreary delighful gardens

fields of mines and yours

folded up in forgotten places

only to reopen old wounds

with the careful unfolding

of an aging yellow letter

Your words wrapped me in the moment effortlessly. I can smell the water and hear the gulls cry.

"We have to give this up".

What a wrenching line for this softly compelling poem, yet it does not detract from the flow of words nor the imagery.

the reads from your random heart,

the thought a pen prevokes,

and the waves that crash into

the shore.

left me feeling that sense

of loss, tongue lays silent

while the soul screams,

' dont go ' .

very well done curious,

I am hooked, again....

-sGp-