All Comments on 'Just a Simple Love Poem'

Nice :) Your image of time stealing time was particularly beautiful and effective. One line reads a bit confusing, interrupts the flow;

"A dim sliver lights dawn in cautious haze.

I recommend.. lights "the" dawn..

first impulse was to read the word "lights" as a noun.

Got it out of your system? Give yourself credit. You write well.

This much better than Chotic love poem.

Liked it.

I can't be objective about the poem. But I think you said it,

Trust springs hope in future's bond.

Time no longer pains.

As objective as I can be, I think both have an infectious, cautious joy.

Thank you for sharing

Good luck on your future together.