All Comments on 'Land'

I think if you would add more punctuation to this piece, it would be so much better. Here are some suggestions in hoping to help:

On angel’s wings I once did fly- On angels wings,

Through clouds of splendor rings (.)

But now walk I the land- But now I walk the land???

Barren, humid, shiftless waste it is-

The barren, humid, shiftless waste it is.

Demon eyes do stare from shadowy places -prehaps shadowed?

A broken, shattered sword in hand- With a broken

I stumble through this land-(.)

Wasteland, wasteland all around (;)

Eye to eye and to frown- a frown??? semi-colon

Covered in rusted steel (.)

Chinked and dented is its feel-it's feel.

I limp along through this land (;)

Children play and disappear

In this land of waste and tear

Coming clouds of rain I see.

Dropping spots of tears and sorrow (;)

Wasteland, wasteland all I see

That one green knoll a memory (,)

That pretty girl a hurt for me- should be reworded. Not proper grammer in this line.

I enjoy helping and hope you didn't take offense. I loved this poem and think you should name it "Wasteland". Just my opinion.