All Comments on 'Last Orders'

YOU used the words I felt, while comrades were sent back in the casket.

I was lucky, just am livng life different now

this just gave me absolute cold chills..excellent work, so sad, and what a wonderful strength you show in this poem, I especially like the structure, nice ;)

Very emotional but also structurally impeccable. There's nothing else I can add to what has already been said. Thank you.

of all the "Last Orders" works I read today.

The way you wove the poem through the different facets of the man's life just really moved me. Thank you for writing this piece.

This is a real tour de force of a poem. I, too, like the way KundaL uses the different formats for the separate phases. Nicely done.

You put this so succinctly. I feel like I know this guy and many of us do. Thanks for the think.

I liked the way you went from the highly structured stanzas in his highly structured life, then slipped to a bit more chaotic stanza form for his time away and then ultimatly the final stanza that slowly fades away.

Excellent...

jim : )

Ohgodddd How well you did this! I'm just dumbstruck... Thank you!